Mid-Term Critiques

My work was critiqued for not having flow between the pieces. My biggest piece, was said to have been successful with movement and the repetition of the bottles being varied enough in the inking that it worked well. Unfortunately, my presentation was poor and my concept pieces or experiments seemed to be grouped in with my actual completed works. I'm not too sure if that is negative, because my concept pieces were meant to look completed but on a smaller scale, to give me an idea if certain arrangements worked together or not. Next time, I will try to present my concept pieces as such and I will leave out the concepts that are not oriented in the same way, literally. One of the professors seemed to note that it broke the flow of the presentation.

Another professor made notice to me that the "cartoony" nature of my figures, made my subject matter seem less serious and in a way eclipsed my subject matter completely. As they did not even think of alcoholism or addiction. This critique has me mentally stuck, because I want my figures to look like that and contort themselves inside the bottles but I am not sure how to make it look less "cartoony" or more serious.

Going back, the "successful" piece had good movement and the variation in the thickness of inking on the bottle stamps worked well within the piece. I think in the future I will try to mimic these core concepts and make my pieces repetitive with some variation and move my elements around more.

Also, I was asked what I was thinking of taking this subject matter next and I was thinking of sculpting with actual bottles but it seemed that, that part of my work was completely ignored and even while I was making the little figures I saw that the idea was very limiting, in that each figure had to be a certain size to even fit in the bottle. But also I found that it is not very effective at evoking my subject matter either. So, now I am thinking of what to do next.